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So i this is an origin story for the turtles that I made one day. It's a mix of the 2003 origin with a few things I got from the secret of the ooze comic and my own ideas. I am not making a story or co.ice out of this I just want to know what people think and all comments are welcome as long as no one is rude.

Origin,

Splinter (same yoshi story 2003) is wandering around the streets and sees a boy with five baby turtles, a teen, and a blind man. When the man tries to crossThe street a truck with the foot clan symbol on it comes to meaning down the street. The teen ones to save the man and knocks the turtles of the boy's hands, they fall down into the sewers along with a canister that flies from the back of the truck. Splinter follows them down into the sewer and gets contaminated with the ooze. The mutation is instantaneous and he begins to lead the newly mutated turtles away from the contamination site. As the last turtle (which is the female I call Riana ( Re-aw-na) shortened to Ria) disappears into the tunnel a foot clan ninja grabs her and puts her in the truck to make up for the lost vial of ooze. Sprinter follows the truck and finds her in Stockman's lab with and mutated Arctic Fox cub. Stockman has Riana on a table and is injecting her with some kind of serum. Splinter grabs Riana and the cub and takes them back to the others. Eight years later the Fox named Lupa (short for Lupine also her weapons are twin scythes) and Ria whose weapons are a bow and two Tekko-kagi that look like wolverine's claws and the other turtles are allowed to go on a supply hunt in the sewer with Splinter. While they are there Leo and Raph got into a fight. Ria pulls out her Tekko-kagi and tries to break it up but she is knocked into a power box and is electrocuted. This activates the serum which causes her to grow bird wings because Stockman was experimenting with cross species mutated genetics.

That's it and I know it's really long so for those of you that read the whole thing what do you think? 